Demon Sense-Reader Feedback

(c) Timothy Valentine, Wikipedia[dc]I[/dc]’m working on a young adult novel called Demon Sense and I’d like your feedback. Since this blog is a bit of my writing palette, I thought I’d post something I’ve been working on. So far, I’m 75 pages into the first draft…

Here’s the hook:

Josh Brown, a fatherless seventeen year old works at his family’s funeral home in Santa Fe, New Mexico and is heir to the family business when he turns eighteen. After the assassination of the Governor of New Mexico, Josh finds himself caught up in a corporate conspiracy designed to kill thousands of people at funerals across America. When he discovers the people behind the plot (and they discover him), Josh faces a battle against time before more innocent people are killed. But Josh perceives there is more going on that meets the eye. Through a series of strange events, Josh realizes that he has received a supernatural gift to see evil in the spiritual realm all around him. Using all five senses, he begins to battle demons, principalities and powers in high places.